In a calm moonless night,
What these things are smoldering bright?
Their legs are at the branches,
Heads to the ground‐side. 4
A lonely traveler wondering Corbett at night.
He doesn’t know the rules and right!
He finds a crack on the forest’s floor.
He seeks to get the last secret door. 8
Nocturnal, hungry, waiting for their prey,
They have potent sense of gray.
When the living world dies in sleep?
They predict their violent chant in grief. 12
Top-ghetto inside the darkest cave,
The front path points to an ancient grave.
The lonely traveler discovers an unknown land,
Long he walked has no idea, thrills! 16
The cave is extremely two-faced,
Cobra protect the entire surface,
The blood‐suckers rush towards the same,
The deadlock traveler becomes their prey. 20
**Tis is one of my early poems written on 24 August, 2007. I was reading Bram Stoker, Mary Shelley kind of stuffs. The theme utterly comes in my mind is creatively dark, cruel and horrific. I don’t know you guys will like it!
Yes… we will like it… It’s very melodic – if you have a sense of music within…
Thanks! It is totally amateur stuff! 🙂
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It is amateur stuff indeed but I like it. You have an extraordinary skill in evoking imagery!
Thanks Ribz! 🙂
Not bad at all – lovin’ the artwork – you should use more in your posts!
I will try! Writing, illustrating or paint for the daily basis. Thanks Marc!
I love it. Good job. 🙂
Thanks! Love! 🙂
It somehow reminds me of Poe. Needs polishing but it has potential. You should try to work on it, now that your approach is more mature.
Its a lot to me. I can’t be Poe, he is a great master in this art. May be one the greatest artist of word! But I will love to polish me. There is nothing so much interesting than learning! 🙂 Thanks Andrée!
very vivid in writing.
Thanks Dan! Love! 🙂
Bats. What a perfectly forgotten topic for a poem. Well done!
I have an eye on the nocturnal animals, specially on the bats! The mammal that can fly create so much mysteries in literature. Some time I think about its unique qualities, and design by God! How he made them? My thoughtful little mind! Thanks Grandfathersky ! 🙂
I’ve always found them fascinating too. I see them in the evening flying around the streetlights catching moths using sonar ! In a world of light I think we human have an issue understanding a creature that can navigate in the darkness …
And highly sophisticated sense of hearing, “ultrasound as shrill with frequencies up to 200 kHz. Ten times than the human ear. We can detect sounds up to about 20 kHz.” “They emit sounds that bounce off of the obstacles in their path, sending echoes back to the bats.” An exceptional quality in the animal world!
It reminds me of “The Listener” by Walter de la Mare! I feel the same spirit in it, specially the imagery!
Thanks Bidisha! Walter de la Mare is a big name for my small stuff, I am just an amateur! 🙂
I love the image of the laughing skulls. The poem is great as well
Thanks Grosenberg for praising me for both! 🙂
Very evocative imagery. Made me shudder a bit.
Don’t shudder Juwanna, its just a fictitious poem! 🙂
Love the illustration
Thanks Katrina! Love! 🙂
I love poems, and I loved yours! Thanks for sharing!
Thanks! Love ! 🙂
Sometimes creepy is strangely attractive…
Thanks for reading my little stuff! 🙂 Most appreciated!
You’re welcome, I don’t comment often, more of the silencious visitor type…:)
OMG, then I am the luckiest guy! Hope more comments from you in my posts! Thanks again! 🙂
Carlsbad Caverns are as special for the bat flights living within – as the stone formations.
Interesting, today I went to Bannerghatta National Park, but there I see no bats! Here is a medium size wood-nut tree just out side my door, and every evening bats come here to eat nuts.
what does “deadlock” in last line mean ?
The word “deadlock” used here to create music, for poetic purpose. The meaning here will be the traveler “unable to move” or “unable to escape” or “no progress can be made”!
Loved it.. Good illustration.
Thanks Keshav! Most Welcome!
Very melodic! I like the flow and the clever wordplay. #salute
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I am running. lol 🙂
I will advise not to run but to fight the situation! lol… Thanks! 🙂
interesting….
Thanks Shoma!
Vikram, very strong images here of bat caves and dangers to travelers passing by! Wonderful metaphor for the pitfalls and dangers of everyday life, right?
Yeah Garnbee, it is indeed the danger we face in everyday life! I think bats are creepy but not really blood suckers! It is literature that make them horrific! 🙂
I like bats, and they do a power of good removing enormous quantities of night insects, which could easily cause plague. But because we don’t see them generally, our fear of the unknown gets a grip of us.
Years ago it was thought a good thing to remove the bat population from New York, but when their function re insects was explained, and that within a week of the bats being exterminated the city would be a yard deep in insect bodies, the plan was abandoned. Takes all kinds to make a world. Kristin
I think in our eco-system every creature is important to balance the environment. I feel devastated when I see those Nat Geo or animal planet programs where govt. kill rabbits, foxes, dogs, monkeys because they are breeding much! It will affect on the environment directly, as you told about the bats. Human are also increasing so the animals are needed to protect and balance the world! I hardly see any animals in my locality except the squirrels now a days.
excellent writing as well as an awesome photograph…damn impressive…
Thanks man!
your welcome Roy…
Dear Vikram, I can go to the dark side, no problem. The earth shows us both day and night. Then what we do with what we discover there is the part I’m most interested in. Constructive vs. destructive – we all have choices.
The image is quite interesting, how you composed it.
You have an uncanny ability to post about things and facts and authors I especially like! And Bram Stoker’s Dracula is one of those favorite stories, for many reasons.
I love bats – coming from Maine, bats are essential in the summertime to eat all the biting insects that otherwise would infest our flesh. And so we built houses for them, encouraged them. Just another perspective 😉
The image is composed, I mean illustrated through Photoshop. I used the painting tools to draw this picture. Thanks! 🙂
I absolutely love this Poem. Not sure I completely inderstand t but I love it. I also really love that illustration for “Bats”.
BTW – happy birthday
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